Sunday, 26 August 2012

Adding detail

This week we have been learning to add detail by starting from 3 or 4 words and changing it to create a better picture. The sentence I choose was THE DOG BARKED
and below this is how I made it more detail.

The brown angry pit-bull barked at me as I slowly and quietly stumbled out of my flash black truck. My heart was beating like an old steam train. My head was pounding and all I had left to do was run.

1 comment:

  1. Hey dude!

    That is cool describing, I like the way you said what you were feeling. You better keep up the good work man.

    From BOB

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